How to Improve a News Release
My blog post from the other day was just turned into a wonderful news release and distributed to the national media. It's worth looking at the before and after versions.
My "before" news release, which was the bare bones of an idea, is on my blog for August 5th.
The "after" news release, expanded and polished by PR Web Direct, and with a stunning photo added, is now online at www.prweb.com/releases/2006/8/prweb421148.htm
Study both.
Ao Akua,
Joe
www.mrfire.com
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My "before" news release, which was the bare bones of an idea, is on my blog for August 5th.
The "after" news release, expanded and polished by PR Web Direct, and with a stunning photo added, is now online at www.prweb.com/releases/2006/8/prweb421148.htm
Study both.
Ao Akua,
Joe
www.mrfire.com
PS -- The next Manifestation Weekend will be Nov 10 - 11 in Austin, Texas. Price is just like the original one: $1,000. Only 25 can attend. If you're interested, send an email to my assistant Suzanne at suzanneburns@austin.rr.com If you want to know what the first weekend was like, see www.BeyondManifestation.com I hope to see you there.
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posted by Joe Vitale | 10:14 AM
2 Comments:
Hi Joe
You're right! It's much better now. I especially liked the improvement of this sentence:
He should know: after years of struggling with his own weight issues, he has lost 80 pounds, transforming himself from Bhudda-like proportions to an Atlas-like physique.
Perhaps because I always suspected that you yourself invented the "He was called the Bhudda of the Internet, now he's the Charles(?) Atlas of the Internet".
But that's just me, sorry. Suspecious nature ;-)
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Kind regards
Britt Malka
www.16min.com/en
My email is jgvitale@ix.netcom.com
thank you
joe
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